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Save Me
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I may have picked up the gun
But you were the one to put it to my head
You told me you loved me
But kept me away
You told me you cared
But you left me alone
My calls for help
Ignored
You were too busy
Too busy to save me
Too busy watching me suffer
You put the gun to my head
But I pulled the trigger
But you were the one to put it to my head
You told me you loved me
But kept me away
You told me you cared
But you left me alone
My calls for help
Ignored
You were too busy
Too busy to save me
Too busy watching me suffer
You put the gun to my head
But I pulled the trigger
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About someone I came to when I used to be suicidal and actively ignored it on purpose to cause me more pain. People can be garbage.
Admittedly not as nice flowing as I wanted, any critique on how to get it to flow better while keeping the general theme the same would be nice.
Admittedly not as nice flowing as I wanted, any critique on how to get it to flow better while keeping the general theme the same would be nice.
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To give critique, "But you were the one to put it to my head" seems a bit too long, don't really know how I would have shortened it down myself, as I always gets problems with this, too long to keep in one row but too short to make it into two... but yeah, that is one part that makes it flow a bit less smoothly, but in general - great poem as always!